My Indignation
In my last work from University I investigated about environment,
and more specifically about Chile's
environmental policies. However I found a letter on internet written from
Greenpeace Chile denouncing that government will not include in the national
parks of the Patagonia the protection of the seas.
This is an opportunity from salmon
companies, in fact now there is 251 applications from this companies waiting
for settle in seas at the end of the world.
This situation offends me because I
don´t understand how Chilean government present itself in the world as a leader
in protection of the seas, but at the same time it admits that salmon companies
control the seas and contaminate it with toxic waste.
Finally, I think that is unacceptable
that the traditional medias don´t show this problem, because chileans trust in
the information that they give.
This implies that people aren´t aware of the country's environmental problems, always believing that everything is right and that the Earth can still be exploited without consequences.
This implies that people aren´t aware of the country's environmental problems, always believing that everything is right and that the Earth can still be exploited without consequences.
Well done, this text reflects your progress durng the course. You have a good structuring, wider lexical range and on the overall the message is clear.
ResponderBorrarHowever, there are several inconcistencies that may affect the specific information you were trying to convey.
Corrections:
opportunity from salmon = opportunity for salmon.
waiting for settle= waiting to settle.
government present itself = Government presents itself.
that is unacceptable= that it is unacceptable.
Greenpeace send to La Tercera= Greenpeace sendt to La Tercera
published in a small space = published it in a small space
T: 3, L: 2, G: 2= 7 pts.
Grade: 5,5